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Monday 13 June 2011

**Target - Next Steps** **Keb revisit your writing. Read is out loud and ask yourself, does this make sense? Edit e.g. make changes and proof read for simple spelling errors and punctuation. Make sure your story does not jump around tense (forest is so big, were playing hide ...)**

**The forest is so big that there out there playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while Bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl.**

**The forest is so big that Pinko and Dingo could play all day. One day they were playing hide and seek, Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100. Then he went to find Dingo**

Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful.

Pinko and Dingo love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. The forest is so big that there out there playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while Bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone......

Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but no sign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon. They went to bed that night not worrying about Bear because they thought that he would come back.

The next day, Bear didn’t come back, Pinko and Dingo were so worried for him. So they next day they tried looking for him the went for about a mile threw the forest crying “BEAR”. Dingo tripes over this unusual ditch it looked like a trap door, “Pinko come” cried Dingo, Pinko came along and saw the trap door they both heard weird nosies coming from down there so the went to cheek it out. When the got down these old looking stairs they there was this long corridor with about 5 doors on each side. Pinko thought to him self what are the consequences if we go down there and Dingo said to him but it is our only chance on finding Bear.They herd all different animals coming from each door. All of the doors had loud animal nosies on each of them but one. They went threw they ended up in a desert they started walking. 3 hours later Pinko and Dingo spotted this really small town of a population of about 20 people. Pinko and Dingo ran to there because they badly wanted a drink so they rushed down there and kindly asked this lady if they could have a drink, she gave them some water when pinko toke a drink he saw on the corner of his eye a guy that was taming a bear, that bear looked just like Bear. They ran to him as fast as they could, “I think you have our bear” said Pinko. “ I don’t think so i found him bush in a forest” said the tamer, “THATS OUR BEAR” Shouted Dingo “GET HIM”. The tamer started running with bear on a leash they ran and ran until the got to a Cliff face. The tamer and Bear stop on there tracks and toke a few steps back, Pinko and Dingo came “Give me our Bear” said Dingo “Never” said the tamer. The tamer jumped leaving bear behind, Dingo and Pinko quickly ran to the cliff face to see if he survived. He didn’t his lonely body lying in a blood puddle dead. Pinko and Dingo ran to bear and gave him the biggest hug ever “We missed you so much” Said pinko, Bear hugged them back. Pinko and Dingo didn’t know how to get home so they walked and walked until they found a door that looked like all the other doors they went threw so they walked threw and the it was the home.

Pinko and dingo still go out to play hide and go seek but now they always make bear play the learnt there lesson on leaving bear behind.

The End

__Wednesday 8 June 2011__

Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful.

Pinko and Dingo Love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. Since the forest is so big there out playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone. Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but no sign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon. Pinko and Dingo went to bed that night not worrying about Bear because they thought that he would come back.

The next day, Bear didn’t come back, Pinko and Dingo were so worried for him. So they next day Pinko and Dingo tried looking for him the went for about a mile threw the forest crying “BEAR were are you”. Dingo tripes over this unusual ditch it looked like a trap door, “Pinko come” cried Dingo Pinko came along and saw the trap door they both heard weird nosies coming from down there so the went to cheek it out. When the got down these old looking stairs they there was this long corridor with about 5 doors on each side. Pinko and Dingo heard random noises coming from the first door they went in and the first second they opened it the whole corridor crashed down just as they went threw. When they got threw the door they ended up in this gigantic jungle, they saw monkeys, tigers, gorilla and Bears. But the bear were up on this big big mountain it was really hard to get up there cause there was lots of obstacles in front. Pinko and Dingo started going threw all these obstacle until they got to this massive heard of lions there was absolutely no way to get threw them. Pinko and Dingo went back a few steps and hide in a bush and started to think of a plan to get to Bear. So they thought and thought for ages, “Got it” said Dingo “When the tiger aren't looking we can jump on there back and ride them all they way up” “Shut up we aren't doing that” said Pinko and just as Dingo turns around they see another door “Look” said Dingo “another door” “Great spotting” Pinko said. When they got up to the door and went threw they ended up in a stranger desert island. Pinko and Dingo went off to search for bear they started to get really thirsty and started having visions about bear they were really delusional. 3 hours later Pinko and Dingo spotted this really small town of a population of about 20 people. Pinko and Dingo ran to there because they badly wanted a drink so they rushed down there and kindly asked this lady if they could have a drink, she gave them some water when pinko toke a drink he saw on the corner of his eye a guy that there was a guy taming a bear, that bear looked just like Bear. Pinko and Dingo ran to him as fast as they could, “I think you have our bear” said Pinko. “ i don’t think so i found this bush in a forest” said the tamer, “THATS OUR BEAR” Said Dingo “GET HIM”. The tamer started running with bear on a leash they ran and ran until the got to a Cliff face. The tamer and Bear stop on there tracks and toke a few steps back, Pinko and Dingo came “Give me our Bear” said Dingo “Never” said the tamer. the tamer jumped leaving bear behind, Dingo and Pinko quickly ran to the cliff face to see if he survived. He didn’t his lonely body lying in a blood puddle died. Pinko and Dingo ran to bear and gave him the biggest hug ever “We missed you so much” Said pinko, Bear hugged them back. Pinko and Dingo didn’t know how to get home so they walked and walked until they found a door that looked like all the other doors they went threw so they walked threw and the it was the home. Pinko and dingo still go out to play hide and go seek but now they always make bear play the learnt there lesson on leaving bear behind.

THE END

__Tuesday 7 June 2011__

Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful.

Pinko and Dingo Love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. Since the forest is so big there out playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone. Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but no sign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon. Pinko and Dingo went to bed that night not worrying about Bear because they thought that he would come back.

The next day, Bear didn’t come back, Pinko and Dingo were so worried for him. So they next day Pinko and Dingo tried looking for him the went for about a mile threw the forest crying “BEAR were are you”. Dingo tripes over this unusual ditch it looked like a trap door, “Pinko come” cried Dingo Pinko came along and saw the trap door they both heard weird nosies coming from down there so the went to cheek it out. When the got down these old looking stairs they there was this long corridor with about 5 doors on each side. Pinko and Dingo heard random noises coming from the first door they went in and the first second they opened it the whole corridor crashed down just as they went threw. When they got threw the door they ended up in this gigantic jungle, they saw monkeys, tigers, gorilla and Bears. But the bear were up on this big big mountain it was really hard to get up there cause there was lots of obstacles in front. Pinko and Dingo started going threw all these obstacle until they got to this massive heard of lions there was absolutely no way to get threw them. Pinko and Dingo went back a few steps and hide in a bush and started to think of a plan to get to Bear. So they thought and thought for ages, “Got it” said Dingo “When the tiger aren't looking we can jump on there back and ride them all they way up” “Shut up we aren't doing that” said Pinko and just as Dingo turns around they see another door “Look” said Dingo “another door” “Great spotting” Pinko said. When they got up to the door and went threw they ended up in a stranger desert island. Pinko and Dingo went off to search for bear they started to get really thirsty and started having visions about bear they were really delusional. 3 hours later Pinko and Dingo spotted this really small town of a population of about 20 people. Pinko and Dingo ran to there because they badly wanted a drink so they rushed down there and kindly asked this lady if they could have a drink, she gave them some water when pinko toke a drink he saw on the corner of his eye a guy that there was a guy taming a bear, that bear looked just like Bear. Pinko and Dingo ran to him as fast as they could, “I think you have our bear” said Pinko. “ i don’t think so i found this bush in a forest” said the tamer, “THATS OUR BEAR” Said Dingo “GET HIM”. The tamer started running with bear on a leash they ran and ran until the got to a Cliff face. The tamer and Bear

__Monday 30 May 2011__

Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful.

Pinko and Dingo Love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. Since the forest is so big there out playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone. Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but no sign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon. Pinko and Dingo went to bed that night not worrying about Bear because they thought that he would come back.

The next day, Bear didn’t come back, Pinko and Dingo were so worried for him. So they next day Pinko and Dingo tried looking for him the went for about a mile threw the forest crying “BEAR were are you”. Dingo tripes over this unusual ditch it looked like a trap door, “Pinko come” cried Dingo Pinko came along and saw the trap door they both heard weird nosies coming from down there so the went to cheek it out. When the got down these old looking stairs they there was this long corridor with about 5 doors on each side. Pinko and Dingo heard random noises coming from the first door they went in and the first second they opened it the whole corridor crashed down just as they went threw. When they got threw the door they ended up in this gigantic jungle, they saw monkeys, tigers, gorilla and Bears. But the bear were up on this big big mountain it was really hard to get up there cause there was lots of obstacles in front. Pinko and Dingo started going threw all these obstacle until they got to this massive heard of lions there was absolutely no way to get threw them. Pinko and Dingo went back a few steps and hide in a bush and started to think of a plan to get to Bear. So they thought and thought for ages, “Got it” said Dingo “When the tiger aren't looking we can jump on there back and ride them all they way up” “Shut up we aren't doing that” said Pinko and just as Dingo turns around they see another door “Look” said Dingo “another door” “Great spotting” Pinko said. When they got up to the door and went threw they ended up in a stranger desert island. Pinko and Dingo went off to search for bear they started to get really thirsty and started having visions about bear they were really delusional. 3 hours later Pinko and Dingo spotted this really small town of a population of about 20 people. Pinko and Dingo ran to there because they badly wanted a drink so they rushed down there and kindly asked this lady if they could have a drink, she gave them some water when pinko toke a drink he saw on the corner of his eye a guy that

__Friday 27 May 2011__

Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful.

Pinko and Dingo Love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. Since the forest is so big there out playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone. Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but no sign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon. Pinko and Dingo went to bed that night not worrying about Bear because they thought that he would come back.

The next day, Bear didn’t come back, Pinko and Dingo were so worried for him. So they next day Pinko and Dingo tried looking for him the went for about a mile threw the forest crying “BEAR were are you”. Dingo tripes over this unusual ditch it looked like a trap door, “Pinko come” cried Dingo Pinko came along and saw the trap door they both heard weird nosies coming from down there so the went to cheek it out. When the got down these old looking stairs they there was this long corridor with about 5 doors on each side. Pinko and Dingo heard random noises coming from the first door they went in and the first second they opened it the whole corridor crashed down just as they went threw. When they got threw the door they ended up in this gigantic jungle, they saw monkeys, tigers, gorilla and Bears. But the bear were up on this big big mountain it was really hard to get up there cause there was lots of obstacles in front. Pinko and Dingo started going threw all these obstacle until they got to this massive heard of lions there was absolutely no way to get threw them. Pinko and Dingo went back a few steps and hide in a bush and started to think of a plan to get to Bear. So they thought and thought for ages, “Got it” said Dingo “When the tiger aren't looking we can jump on there back and ride them all they way up” “Shut up we aren't doing that” said Pinko and just as Dingo turns around they see another door “Look” said Dingo “another door” “Great spotting” Pinko said. When they got up to the door and went threw they ended up in a stranger desert island.

__Thursday 26 May 2011__

Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful.

Pinko and Dingo Love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. Since the forest is so big there out playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone. Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but no sign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon. Pinko and Dingo went to bed that night not worrying about Bear because they thought that he would come back.

The next day, Bear didn’t come back, Pinko and Dingo were so worried for him. So they next day Pinko and Dingo tried looking for him the went for about a mile threw the forest crying “BEAR were are you”. Dingo tripes over this unusual ditch it looked like a trap door, “Pinko come” cried Dingo Pinko came along and saw the trap door they both heard weird nosies coming from down there so the went to cheek it out. When the got down these old looking stairs they there was this long corridor with about 5 doors on each side. Pinko and Dingo heard random noises coming from the first door they went in and the first second they opened it the whole corridor crashed down just as they went threw. When they got threw the door they ended up in this gigantic jungle, they saw monkeys, tigers, gorilla and Bears. But the bear were up on this big big mountain it was really hard to get up there cause there was lots of obstacles in front. Pinko and Dingo started going threw all these obstacle until they got to this massive heard of lions there was absolutely no way to get threw them. Pinko and Dingo went back a few steps and hide in a bush and startd to think of a plan to get to Bear.

__Monday 23 May 2011__

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Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful. =====

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Pinko and Dingo Love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. Since the forest is so big there out playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone. Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but nosign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon. Pinko and Dingo went to bed that night not worrying about Bear because they thought that he would come back. The next day, Bear didn’t come back, Pinko and Dingo were so worried for him. So they next day Pinko and Dingo tried looking for him the went for about a mile threw the forest crying “BEAR were are you”. Dingo tripes over this unusual ditch it looked like a trap door, “Pinko come” cried Dingo Pinko came along and saw the trap door they both heard weird nosies coming from down there so the went to cheek it out. When the got down these old looking stairs they there was this long corridor with about 5 doors on each side. Pinko and Dingo heard random noises coming from the first door they went in and the first secon they opened it the whole corridor crashed down =====

__Friday 20 May 2011__

Once upon time there were two cavemen called Pinko and Dingo they lived in the woods with the pet Bear his name was “Bear”. They loved there life's because they were the only ones in a gigantic forest so it was nice and peaceful.

Pinko and Dingo Love playing games in the forest like hide and go sec. Since the forest is so big there out playing for most of the day. But one day Pinko and Dingo were playing hide and go sec and Pinko was in so he counted until he got to 100 then he went to find Dingo, mean while bear is at home having a sleep and soddenly he starts randomly growling, Bear doesn't usually growl. Pinko and Dingo quickly ran but home to cheek on him the ran as fast as they can, when they got back Bear was gone. Pinko and Dingo ran all around the forrest yelling “BEAR WERE ARE YOU” the searched till morning till night but no sign of Bear. Pinko and Dingo went back home thinking that Bear would tern up soon