T1+Persuade

L.I. We are learning make content relevant and add weight to argument by having an effective position statement, main points, evidence and restatement. Contain elaboration of main points. E ffective position statement: S.C. we can
 * make our position and purpose clear
 * use a rhetorical question
 * include a list of fact/evidence that will be discussed in writing

Restatement, elaboration of main points: S.C. We Can
 * restate my position throughout my writing
 * make a main point and back it up with evidence or statistics

__ Monday 14 March 2011 __

Tauranga Intermediate 30 18Th Avenue

Dear Mr Diver

I am writing to you to thank you for the extended morning tea and to encourage you to continue these extended morning teas at Tauranga Intermediate. I will prove to you that extended morning teas are a good idea as they will help students focusing in class, teacher having more relaxation or finishing work and students continuing to have good behavior. Don’t you want this stuff to happen in your school? (Mrs Stock - NS Identify position clearly, establish point to discuss and use a rhetorical question)

I believe if you give more Extended Morning Tea will give the kids more fresh air so they can focus better on there work. From the fresh air it could help the kids much more with there consideration on the reading, Literacy, spelling and maths. Don’t you want this stuff to happen in your school?

Extended morning teas will give the teachers more time to relax and make the teacher not grumpy at the kids cause the teachers spend a lot of time with the kids. With the teacher not angry it will make the kids happy and would like to get in to class quicker so you can continue giving out more extended morning teas. Do you won’t this stuff to happen at your school?.

So you see extended morning teas will help the kids and the teacher and i also reckon you would be to.

Keb you have clearly identified your position in your opening statement, used a rhetorical questions and identified what information will follow. You have also used evidence to back up your writing.

__Thursday 7 April 2011__

Most people believe that it would be real good if New Zealand started using Nuclear power Stations. I Believe we shouldn’t, it is fine just using wind power and solar power. I Think that having nuclear power would be bad for New zealand. It provides deadly toxic waste to the world, more damage to Global Warming and takes out some of the worlds water supplies there is all sorts. Do you want this to happen to our world?.

Nuclear Power Plants is really bad for the waste it provides for our world and it also doesn't have a safely place to store it. Thousands of people in Chernobyl have died of cancer from wind carrying the toxic waste. Nuclear Power stations provide 25 to 30 tones of waste each year EACH YEAR. It is not fear on the families that live next to Nuclear Power stations they could die cause of the toxic waste flowing in the air. Burying it is not safe because containers can rust and toxic waste can seep through into soil / water. Just the USA have produced 49.000 metric tones of deadly toxic waste.

You see what happened to japan its because of Nuclear Power stations. New Zealand Has been threw a lot of earthquakes. If we stared using Nuclear Power stations christchurch would be much worse that what it is already is. Japan for example if Japan didn’t have Nuclear Power it wouldn’t be like it is now and there would be more people alive. 200 Nuclear melt down near missis have already occurred in USA thats just 1 country.

So you see Nuclear Power Plants can kill our planet and make you sick and die. New Zealand doesn't want to be like japan we don’t so don’t start building Nuclear power Plants. I would rather have expensive electricity then killing other people it is NOT fair on the people. So don’t start building Nuclear power plants around New Zealand and even the rest of the world. Do you want to hurt our world